1.   October 1, 2013  
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    A Poem.

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  2.   October 1, 2013  
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    Good structure.
    "The song with with which" <-- one too many with's
    "We're born to die,
    Not born to live," <-- felt like that was the shift, pretty obvious and puts a good change of mood in the poem,

    I liked it overall, but damn AJ let me give you a hug please D:
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  3.   October 2, 2013  
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  4.   October 2, 2013  
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    Talk to me on Skype more.

    I quit cata doe. Got boring.
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  5.   October 2, 2013  
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